The 19-year-old pianist and composer performed his most

Question

The 19-year-old pianist and composer performed his most recent work all over Europe, Asia, and North America last year, winning prestigious awards in both London as well as Tokyo for his achievement at so young an age, and he is hoping to continue composing now that he has returned to Chicago.

Option A
Option B
Option C
Option D
Option E

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Solution

Sentence Analysis

The sentence talks about a person, 19-year-old pianist and composer. He performed his most recent work all over three continents, and while doing so, he won prestigious awards in London and Tokyo for his achievement at such a young age. He hopes to continue composing now that he has returned to Chicago.

There is one main error in this sentence: “both…as well as” is incorrect. The correct idiom is “both…and”.

Also, we should generally prefer using ‘simple present’ over ‘present progressive’ for general statements. ‘Present progressive’ should generally be restricted to actions happening in the moment. Therefore, it is preferable to write ‘he hopes’ rather than ‘he is hoping’.

Option Analysis

(A) Incorrect. For the explanation provided above.

(B) Incorrect. In this sentence, ‘hoping’ has been made parallel to ‘winning’, and thus, it acts as a clause modifier to the clause ‘He performed his most recent work…”. Clearly, “hoping to continue” doesn’t provide any additional information about the clause and rather is unrelated to the clause. Thus, the modification is incorrect.

(C) Incorrect. For the following reasons:

  1. “having verb-ed” (having won) is used to refer to an action completed before another action. For example: “Having broken the glass, Ram immediately left the place”. In this case, “breaking the glass” happens before “leaving the place”. However, in this sentence, “winning the prestigious awards” is not an earlier event for any other event. Thus, “having won” is incorrect.
  2. Parallelism error: “in London” and “Tokyo” are not parallel.
  3. “hoping” seems to be hanging out in the open. Here, it is in an even worse position than it was in option C.

(D) Correct. Both the problems in the original sentence have been corrected. Also, “so young an age” (which I didn’t like but didn’t have the reasons to counter) has been replaced by (much better looking) “such a young age”.

(E) Incorrect. For the following reasons:

  1. Error no. 1 of option C
  2. “both…as well as” is unidiomatic.
  3. Error no. 2 of option C.

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